Pictures in the Mind

I have been learning to use words that give readers pictures in their minds.

On 14 November, it was Athletics Day. I was super pumped for this day.

When I did sprints on Athletics Day, I lined up with the ten year olds. I ran with Drew, Richard, and Cameron. The people that I were racing looked like they were faster than me. When the gun went off, it sounded like a rifle gun. I started running. I sprinted fast. When I was running, I felt like I was running as fast as a cheetah. My tummy hurt but I kept running. It felt like it had beetles crawling around in it. There was still far to go but I kept going. When I was half way there, I noticed that I was coming third so I stopped and walked only for about 3 seconds. When I got to the finish line, I was puffing like a steam train. I noticed that Richard and the rest were puffing too.

I felt great because I ran a hundred metres and could still walk. If you want to know how far a hundred metres are, it is not that far but it is enough to make you puff.  

Great improvement in telling the events and using words to give your readers pictures in their minds.

Tau Ke Night

We drove last night to school for Tau Ke night. 
When we got there, Peggy tattooed my chest. Next, I got changed. 
After a while waiting, we went into the school kitchen then we waited some more for our time to shine. 
When we got called up to do our class performance, I was so nervous I nearly wet my pants, but I got through it ok. 
When we performed our rakau sticks song, Flynn was my partner. 
After a while,we did our Kapa Haka performance with Room 5. We sang a whole lot of songs, then the boys did the haka. We were very loud. 
I saw my mum and dad and, when it was over, I was very glad with myself. It was a great night.
You can see our performances at this link.

E Papa Waiari

Rory Alex E Papa Waiari from Pam Thomson on Vimeo.

Athletics Day